tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2502176161456143914.post2408645562500523980..comments2024-03-08T09:09:27.748-05:00Comments on Tara Tyler Talks: GUTGAA SPP #10 - The Exception to the RuleTara Tylerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07587802105993889515noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2502176161456143914.post-2724889467261269422012-10-01T18:32:35.056-04:002012-10-01T18:32:35.056-04:00You do a good job setting up the story in your que...You do a good job setting up the story in your query but there are some editing issues straight out of the gate that need addressed. You need commas here and take out 'doctor': "When Dr. Katrina “Kat” Vallia, an idealistic young American who's not very worldy, travels halfway across the globe..."<br />And these are one sentence: "Coming fresh off a bad break up with her long-time boyfriend, she decides to throw herself..."<br />I'll be voting later so check back! Good luck!Slave to the Musenoreply@blogger.com