Shadows crept across the wall through the skylight, the lone window of the dim lab. Kellian had only two hours to come up with a cure or Victor would exile him to Siberia.
He was no babysitter. Foolish, spoiled boy. He told him not to touch anything. Kellian glanced at the unconscious, orange six-year-old hellion. Innocent in sleep.
As Kellian stirred one more possible solution, Victor burst in with his two thugs. Early.
“What have you done?!”
“I told you this was no place for a child! I turned around for one second and…”
“No!” Victor rushed over to his son.
“I am working on an antidote. But what he drank should not have affected him this way.”
“You drink it!”
“But how will I…?”
“Drink it!”
Kellian shook his head. No use arguing. He should have studied computers. He picked up the flask of orange liquid.
“Wait! I know what happened.”
Victor smiled. “Drink it.”
“But…” Victor knew too. Kellian’s shoulders sank. He drank it.
As he fell to the floor, grasping his throat for air, nose bleeding, the devil child sat up and laughed.
Kellian’s eyes found the photo of the beach he longed for and everything faded.
So that was Rachael's first campaign challenge, hope you liked it!
Now I must tell you all about some upcoming events...
- Monday, 2/27 - I hope you will stop by as I am hosting Laura Josephson and helping with her RISING series book launch!
- Tuesday, 2/28 - Alex's release party!
- Wednesday, 2/29 - Blurb me! I am celebrating you all, my 300+ followers. Drop by and leave me a few words about your latest WIP and win DIVERGENT by Veronica Roth!
- But Rachael has a bigger list of things to do here
Wait, was the orange kid just faking it? Ouch, that sucks for Kellian!
ReplyDeleteEveryone has gone in such a different direction with the prompts.
ReplyDeleteAnd thanks for mentioning my release party. One more week!
Uh oh. Doesn't look good for Kellian, does it!!
ReplyDeleteOh no! Poor Kellian! That definitely wasn't expected!! Great job!
ReplyDeleteI'm entry #19
How diabolical. I expect nothing less from your awesome prose. Nice one! :)
ReplyDeleteDamn good entry...mean guys and poor Kellian pays the price. For a minute I thought of Snape.. :)
ReplyDeletePoor guy, very tense situation! Great job!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting! It's fascinating how many stories can all come from the same prompt.
ReplyDeleteInteresting story . . . totally unexpected.
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ReplyDeletePoor Kellian! Very intense, great job! :)
ReplyDeleteI'm #39
Dang! Kellian! You piqued my interest. Nice work ;)
ReplyDeleteOh! And new follower... thanks also for your kind comment ;)
Ack! That was pretty darn intriguing for 200 words, Tara. Nice work! :D
ReplyDeleteI was completely not expecting that. Really well done! You definitely get a vote from me and I'm following you :)
ReplyDeleteSamantha
Writing Through College
I love reading your writing! You're amazing. Very unique.
ReplyDeleteNice twist with the orange boy. I love how you all came up with such different stories using the same prompts.
ReplyDeleteI love treachery in stories. :) Nice job.
ReplyDeleteHa, nice twist. Well done.
ReplyDeletePoor guy. I feel bad for him. This was a great piece. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI love how you made the boy orange. Very unexpected twist. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI totally didn't expect the boy to be faking it! Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteSeriously ... was the boy just faking it? ARRRGG! :) Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteSeriously cool! Truly enjoyed the creativity you showed with this short tale. Way to go :)
ReplyDeleteI love how everyone's got a completely different interpretation of the prompts! Good job, great suspense!
ReplyDeleteGreat suspense. "Drink it!" Loved it. :)
ReplyDeleteI want to know who these people are. backstory please. Mine is # 71
ReplyDeleteDarn orange hellion. I hate how short these pieces are. I need to know the rest of the story. ;)
ReplyDeletePoor guy! That is frustrating! Interesting use of the color orange too!
ReplyDeleteLove the ending, what a shock! :)
ReplyDeleteLittle orange brat! I like this one :)
ReplyDelete#83
Nice twist, love a good surprise!
ReplyDeleteEvil little kid... very creative story!
ReplyDeleteVery creative :) Loved the ending!
ReplyDeleteSeems like Kellian was set up. Very skilfully done, like it a lot!
ReplyDeleteHmmm--that was creepy. And you evened managed the picture prompt. Nice!
ReplyDeleteLee (#126 on the Campaign Challenge List)
An A to Z Co-Host
Tossing It Out
Twitter: @AprilA2Z
#atozchallenge
Oh heartbreak, I feel bad for the MC, I don't want him to die, (if he does). Great story!
ReplyDeleteHa! Awesome ending......don't mess with the orange devil!!
ReplyDeleteSo wonderful to read your story!!
ReplyDeleteLol, "He should have studied computers." What a great twist at the end!
ReplyDeleteLove the twist!
ReplyDeleteOrange brat! Like a worse-nightmare-come-true scenario...
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff!
Enjoyed the twist, interesting!
ReplyDeleteThat was totally creepy, and a unique approach to the prompt. How much worse would it have been if he'd defied orders? Bad enough for him to drink it even knowing what would happen, apparently.
ReplyDeleteYour submission has been short listed as a finalist. This is stage 2. Stage 4 will announce the winner.
Congrats! You've been shortlisted as one of my top 2 to move on as a SEMI-FINALIST. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteCongratulations, you have been chosen as a winner in the first Campaign challenge.
ReplyDeleteHaha, lovely and creative Tara! I certainly didn't see that coming. And to think the boy was faking it - just to get him dead, I'm guessing O_O
ReplyDeleteI've awarded you Tenth Place overall in the Judging Round! A huge congrats to you, and don't forget to pop by my blog to see the prizes you've won :)
Hugs,
Rach
Well done in the challenge!
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