Gumshoe
I open my eyes to darkness.
Where am I?
I feel my head. Ouch! What a lump!
Think, Mason. What’s the last thing you remember?
The warehouse. To meet Melanie. Pick up evidence.
I got it all right.
So where am I? I get up and start walking. A sign. Highway 82, mile 43. IE, BFE.
Headlights approach. The car stops. It’s Melanie.
“Get in.” I do.
She eyes me. “Rocko followed me. I didn’t know until you arrived. I had to scram.”
I nod.
“Take the envelope. Jump out at this gas station.” Our eyes lock. “I’ll be in touch.”
She slows. I hit the road and roll.
Women.
BTW! M Pax's novel Semper Audacia came out today! Help celebrate!!
Come back here on Monday, October 31 to join in a spooky 100 word or so "Haunted Drabble" *insane laughter*
13 comments:
The last line "women" was spot on. I pictured an eye roll and heard clear disgust in his voice. Good job!
liked this!
Mason's having a rough day!
Nice tension and fast pacing! Great drabble Tara!
I loved it. That pic combined with the style and pacing of the drabble worked like a charm.
Love the ending.
PS: I changed my URL and username back to southpaw, but managed to mess up my feeds.
Thanks for the shoutout, Madeleine.
I loved your scene. Mason isn't having a very good day. Is he?
LOL. I love how it ends with "Women." haha. So perfect and very interesting. Great job.
Great tension. The dialog moves action quickly. Love the last sentence!
Loved it! Great ending. :)
Thanks, you guys!
Mason is tough. This is nothing! If he isnt getting beat up, he doesnt feel alive. Yes, he is a troubled soul...I really get into my characters' heads!
gripping.
Great atmosphere and pace !
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