Saturday, November 5, 2011

PAD #5 - broken

PAD #5 - broken (also using for Janet Reid's contest with five highlighted words, I can't resist!)

Raising the Argo

Discovery of a broken ship
          Grasping fringe of treasure
                   Hope.

Couple parts as one dives deep,
          Trucks down fathoms, snags on
                   Slope.

Countdown ends above, she worries
          For his breath. Can he
                   Cope?

Eyes are faint, searching upward.
          Is this the end?
                   Nope.

Truth of Ren proves its worth. She
                    Appears. He’s not a-
Lone.

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5 comments:

Donna K. Weaver said...

Wow, nice. And I like what you've done with the place.

junebug said...

I really liked this! You were able to pack lots into such a small piece.

Angela Cothran said...

You truly are a poet :)

Tara Tyler said...

you guys are sweet. i know you felt sorry for my low comment count =)

Donna, thanks! i had to put up my own leaves cause i saw so many otjeds with the pretty ones from blogger...

Junebug, i love doing that, thanks! and how are you dong? i need an update!

Angie, my true friend! really helping me get further in my writing =)

Liz Fichera said...

Oooh, clever! I like!