Wednesday, February 8, 2012

Between Brothers

A Dialog Only Intro, Day 2 in the "I'm hearing voices" blogfest!

Dawson: Hey, Bro. Why don’t you come up for a visit this weekend?

Cooper: I think I’m busy.

D: Right. Doing what?

C: Stuff.

D: Come on. Chelsea wants to fix you up. And this girl is poppin’!

C: Aren’t you a little old to say “poppin’?” And what does that even mean?

D: Eye poppin’ or something? I don’t know, but she’s gorgeous! You need to get out more.

C: You’re right. I’m going out right now. I have to hide behind a dumpster.

D: Oh, did the baker have some dough stolen? Ha!

C: Good one.

D: I know, sorry. But seriously, come up. The kids would love to see their Uncle Coop.

C: We’ll see.

D: That’s a yes! I’ll see you Saturday. Even if I have to pop down there and drive you myself.

C: What? No campaigning this weekend?

D: I got time off for good behavior. Don't even think about cancelling.

C: Fine. Just make sure you call first.

D: Right. See you then.

And today is also, Sensational Haiku Wednesday! topic - relief

My stress relievers
Reading a book, exercise,
Chocolate and smiles

Sons getting along
Not complaining, but laughing
Draws sigh of relief

Disaster relief
Compassion brings us closer
Donations from heart

45 comments:

Heather M. Gardner said...

Tease.

Carol L McK said...

Real life haiku ~ children are adorable ~ namaste, carol (A Creative Harbor) SH ^_^

E. Arroyo said...

I can totally see my kids having this conversation when they're older.

Madeleine Maddocks said...

Enjoyed your haiku.
Great scene developing in the dialogue excerpt.

Danielle B. said...

Dawson and Cooper are so cute! Reminds me of my kids. I could go on and on.

J. A. Bennett said...

Poppin' I'm going to be laughing about that all day!

Karen said...

Great haiku! Chocolate...the best stress reliever!

anthonynorth said...

Ah, the conversations of kids :-)
Enjoyed the haiku.

Emily R. King said...

I know what he meant by "poppin'" ; )

Jenny S. Morris said...

Nice brotherly interchange. Love the name Cooper. And I love the Haiku.

Rena said...

Nice Haiku, and I can really see that exchange happening between two brothers.

Angela Cothran said...

Tara--I love how natural this sounded. Very Cooper and Dawson :) Great job!

Laura Josephsen said...

Oh, brothers!

Great pick and haiku, too. :D

Julie said...

Love the dialogue, Dawson and Cooper's banter made me laugh and I could totally hear the words in my head. Great haiku, too! :)

becca givens said...

Two different directions for relief ... both welcomed! Nicely done!

Christine Rains said...

I love that banter! Wonderful haiku as well. It's great when kids can get along.

Cassie Mae said...

Great sibling dynamic! I totally pictured them. (Actually, my mind went to Step-brothers for some reason, lol)

Love it!

Gwen said...

Cooper reminds me of my own brother. ^_^

Ria said...

Love your tension relief.. add knitting and we could totally hang out.

MISH said...

Great collection of stress-relievers... I suspect that you're one of the many chocoholics. LOL!

Carol Kilgore said...

LOL - they sound EXACTLY like brothers! Good job. And great haiku, too.

Leigh Covington said...

Love the brothers! So real! It's like you don't even have to try to be awesome! Not fair!

And great job on the haiku too! :)

Hywela Lyn said...

I never had brothers of my own, but I can well imagine two brothers reacting with each other just like this!

Cortney Pearson said...

Cute, love the brother aspect and their relationship, how they seem to read one another. Nice!

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Really bright, natural sounding dialogue. Makes me wish I had a brother! Roland

Tasha Seegmiller said...

Great job. I love their conversation, felt like I was really eavesdropping on someone :)

Stina Lindenblatt said...

Great dialogue.

Love the Haiku. I'd love it too if my kids got along better.

McKenzie McCann said...

Poppin'. The word reminds me of the play Chicago.

I get a good sense of vocal pattern from your writing.

Nicki Elson said...

Cool set up between the bros. And lovely haiku as always - with a super cute picture. :)

Margaret said...

especially all at one time? LOL (exercising, reading, eating chocolate :)

Deana said...

HA! Those brothers sound like my husband and his brothers. Poppin':) Very cute!

Damyanti said...

Sibling exchange at its best :). Lovely piece of writing!




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Suzy said...

Love your stress relievers. thanks for visiting my blog.

Kelley said...

These brothers are great! Totally love the voice!

Great job!

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Melissa Sugar said...

Nice Haikus. I am a new follower from the bloghop & I love, love, love your blog design. Interesting characters and great exchange. I have a new word, "Popping" I like it.

Trisha said...

haha, love the lame jokes. This lil bro sounds like he means well, even if he can be a pain for Cooper at times!

Sari Webb said...

Hehe. Poppin'. Love it when people use slang they don't know the meaning of and then get called up on it. Great bit of dialogue!

Tara Tyler said...

again, thanks for the outpouring of relating and praise!
this fest is wonderful for character development!
so glad they sound believable. i know them so well, they are to me!

i have enjoyed reading your conversational slices of life, a small piece of their life! thanks for sharing. cant wait for tomorrow =)

and fellow haiku-ists!

kkkkaty said...

Just want to add my praise for your 3 choices for the different definitions of the word 'relief'.

Hope Roberson said...

That was fun dialogue! And awesome haiku, great weaving of emotion :)

Theresa Milstein said...

Poppin? This guy needs a new friend! Thanks for the laugh.

Small Town Shelly Brown said...

OMGoodnessGracious! Guess what word I took out of my entry because I didn't think anyone would know what it meant? POPPIN'! It litters that MS but I thought I'd take it out for the contest. LOL!
I'm glad someone else uses funny slang.
And good entry BTW :) Very fun!

Sara said...

That was fun. I could really see them as brothers.

Jenn @ Youknow...that Blog? said...

Poppin' haiku too, Tara! You know, I don't think I've ever in my life had a conversation where anyone used the word "poppin'"... maybe my youthful years were time shifted just enough to miss it!

Great takes on "relief". :)

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Fun dialogue! And I enjoyed your haiku!