Monday, May 9, 2011

Kick start Monday

How about a little flash fiction for Monday? I like to take the Absolute Writes Water Cooler Flash Fiction Challenge Sundays 9-10:30 pm. I took a break in April and I'm glad to be back, getting those brain juices flowing! Yesterday's prompt was "turned on" - but I'm not that kind of girl, so here is what I wrote:


That was the worst date I've been on in a long time. I will never let Paul set me up again. Where are my stupid keys? I can never find anything in this purse!

Oh, no. He's still sitting there in his car waving at me with that big dumb grin. I hope he doesn't get out to help me!

Ah. There they are.

See? I found them. Now go away and leave me alone.

There. I'm in.

What? Now the lights won't work. Great. The other houses have power, it must be a fuse. Now I get to feel my way down to the basement and check the fuse box. I'm calling Trina and finding a flashlight. I think there's one in the kitchen.

Ow! Stupid side table. Oh, man. She didn't pick up. At least I'm at the sink. I hope I put the flashlight back. And the batteries work!

Oh, good. It works. I hate this! I'm trying my neighbor, Jacob. I really don't want to go down in the basement by myself in the dark. A boyfriend would be good in this situation. Too bad I don't have one.

Jacob isn't picking up either. Where is everyone? Well, I guess I have to brave up and go down. There's no monsters or robbers. I have my phone. I'll be fine. I hate this!

Stupid creaky stairs. Now I have to remember which wall...

"SURPRISE!"

AAAHHHH!

"I think she fainted."

"I think we should've turned on the lights before shouting, 'Surprise.'"

7 comments:

Laura Josephsen said...

LOL! I was all worried she would be attacked by something crazy in the basement, and then that ending! :D Very nice job.

Dana said...

LOL Love the surprise ending!

Heather Henry said...

That was a lot of fun, I was not expecting that! haha! Great job!

Rhonda Albom said...

LOL - you had me here. I was actually worried about the creepy guy in the car. Well done :)
And for being so versatile, I bestow upon you the Versatile Blogger Award. I linked my current post to my name, so stop by and pick up your award and see the "rules" which you can ignore if you want.

Heather M. Gardner said...

Ha! Got me. I guess I'm so warped I always think something bad will happen!
Nice work.

C R Ward said...

LOL This was great! I'd have probably fainted too! :-)

Tara Tyler said...

i always have fun with these.
i might have to end with the expected one of these times, so you won't always look for a twist! i love to keep you guessing =)