I haven't done one of these in a while. Thanks to Aheila for her Drabble Day Challenges. Monday's prompt was “paint.” Here's my offering =)
“Hey, are you ok?”
“Sure, I’m fine.”
“What happened?”
“Nothing, why?”
“You’re bleeding.”
“Right there. On your elbow.”
“What did you do?”
“I don’t know.”
“You don’t know? That’s a lot of blood.”
“It doesn’t hurt.”
“Where were you earlier?”
“Art class.”
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And over at Confessions from Suit 500 they are having a quick prompt contest for an advance copy of Original Sin by Lisa Deroshers. You have to use these five words in a 100 word or less story:
Personal, Demons, Hellbent, Original, Sin; Bonus Points if you use the phrase "A Devil's Own"
Entries are due by midnight Thursday. Here's mine...
With each step the fragrance thickens. I crane my neck around the corner and suck in the enticing aroma.
There it is. Like original sin, too tempting to avoid. It’s only three feet away. I draw another deep breath and…gag! The demon’s stench invades my nostrils.
I scan the room. There. My arch enemy, hellbent to destroy me, saunters in and sprawls on his pillow, falling into a cream coma.
I silently scamper to my prize, remove it and position the contraption perfectly.
SNAP!
Mrowr!
His inflamed green eyes catch my smiling black ones. This time it’s personal.
9 comments:
Haha! I love that both of these had a twist. :) Great entry! Hope you win. And thanks for your kind words on My Blog.
Tara--you are so good at this..Your blog makes me smile..Thank you
I like your drabble dialogue ~~ it has a smooth , natural feel to it .
The second piece is mysterious & edgy ...
These are both so good, Tara! I loved the twist at the end of the first one. LOL!
I agree with Sharon--your blog makes me smile!
Wow. I loved the humour in the first one and the second was deliciously dark, which I love!
Ellie Garratt
You guys always make me smile with your comments =)
I love the different affects each person gets from the pieces. I like doing them, even if I don't win.
Thanks!
I loved both of your short pieces!
And I have to say, you're a bad influence on me. I checked out the link and the next thing you know I'm coming up with my own 100 words for Original Sin. Good luck to us both! :-)
I like the quick dialog for the 'Paint' drabble. It shows a lot about the characters (one caring, the other usually distracted (or so we can assume)). Nicely done!
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