Monday, October 1, 2012

GUTGAA SPP #8 - Caribbean Crossroads

CARIBBEAN CROSSROADS
Romance
81,000

Query:

New college grad Megan McCormick just got dumped. Hard.

Swearing off men and relationships, Megan is coaxed into performing on a cruise ship where she meets the star entertainer, Bryant Johnson. Handsome and charismatic, he is definitely trouble, but she can't deny the attraction between them.

Urged by his family to find a wife and run the family lumber business, Bryant is torn between his family’s expectation for his life and his own. However, when he meets spunky, but love-skittish Megan McCormick, settling down doesn’t look so bad.

Just when Megan begins to trust again and Bryant makes some big decisions regarding his future, Megan's former fiancè returns with a malicious surprise, which takes Bryant and Megan to their own CARIBBEAN CROSSROADS.

First 150:

The blind date was late.
Megan sat on the edge of the couch and glanced again through the window, watching and dreading the promise of another awkward evening. She moved her tennis racket to check her watch. Five more minutes, and counting. Dates got a max of ten minutes wait time, no exceptions. But why even wait? This tennis date was another one of Jillian’s ideas, not hers. Then again, it was still better to trust a well-intentioned roommate than her own intuition right now. 

 
Through the window a movement on the opposite balcony caught her eye—a group of animated college students headed toward the stairs. The perk of many apartment complexes at Nevada Groves University was the fishbowl square, allowing each apartment—at a glimpse—to know their neighbor.


Who was that? Was it… Megan jerked forward, a sharp panic in the pit of her stomach. Could it be Jackson?

4 comments:

Slave to the Muse said...

I like the setting! The cruise ship premise is good. I would play that angle up as much as possible in both the query and the manuscript. Good job! I'll be voting later so check back!

Manchee said...

This seems unique and well-written. I like it! You've got my vote.

Amy Lichtenhan said...
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Amy Lichtenhan said...

I'm one of the small-press judges and noticed your query. I would love to take a closer look.

Please send query and first three chapters to submissions@sapphirestarpublishing.com

Amy Lichtenhan
Sapphire Star Publishing