Monday, October 1, 2012

GUTGAA SPP #10 - The Exception to the Rule

The Exception to the Rule

When Dr. Katrina “Kat” Vallia an idealistic young American doctor who's not very worldy travels halfway across the globe to work in a poor African Village, she looks at it as a means of closure. Coming fresh off a bad break up with her long-time boyfriend. She decides to throw herself into her work without any distractions from a man.  That's until she encounters  Dr. Julian Kiron, a handsome, career driven Pediatric Oncologist. She finds herself falling in love with him even though she knows that they want two very different things out of life.  Not willing to sacrifice her dreams, she sadly says goodbye, never revealing her deepest secret to him.  Six years later she is forced to face her past to save the one person she loves the most and possibly rekindle the love that she let slip away.

First  150 words:

June 2004

Being a busy pediatrician just starting out doesn’t afford much free time. So, I was ecstatic when my last patient canceled, allowing me to slip out of work a little earlier than usual.  It was my boyfriend Jake’s thirtieth birthday and I had planned on taking him out for a nice romantic dinner, something we hadn’t done in a long time, since we had both become so busy with our careers.
Jake and I met five years ago and had been together ever since. We were semi-living together.  I had spent most of my nights at his house, making sure I slept at home a couple of nights a week.

1 comment:

Slave to the Muse said...

You do a good job setting up the story in your query but there are some editing issues straight out of the gate that need addressed. You need commas here and take out 'doctor': "When Dr. Katrina “Kat” Vallia, an idealistic young American who's not very worldy, travels halfway across the globe..."
And these are one sentence: "Coming fresh off a bad break up with her long-time boyfriend, she decides to throw herself..."
I'll be voting later so check back! Good luck!

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